Monday, 14 September 2009

Chapter 16

Mark and the police had burst in as soon as they heard the gun shot, Rochelle had told Mark whilst they were in the car to alert the police of where they were and as the police proceeded to apprehend Monique, Rico and Kieran, Mark looked down to see Rochelle's body on the ground, a deep hole in her arm. Michelle was shaking her, "Wake up Chelle- please wake up Chelle."
Mark walked over to her, picked Michelle up but not before kissing Rochelle on the head, as Mark took Michelle out to her mother who was wailing and sobbing with Sandra and Gavin he heard the paramedic say, "we have one fatality," as the other paramedics rushed in to the warehouse.
As Monique, Rico and Kieran were escorted out of the warehouse, Michelle screamed, "It was them- they killed Rochelle- they shot her in the arm!!."
Monique looked down as they read all three of them their rights and pushed them into the police car.
Sandra rushed into the warehouse to see Chelle's body being wrapped up and put on a stretcher, "Can i take one last look at her?", she sobbed. The parademics looked to each other and then the head detective said, "No- i'm afraid that's not possible."
"But why not- she was like my daughter."
Detective O'Mara looked at Sandra and said, "Kieran and Rico are two well known criminals who served time for hurting this very girl- if i tamper with the body which is what id be doing if i let you see her- id be tampering with evidence which could see them walk free"

"But that doesn't make any sense," Sandra said, "Let me see her- who made the call to my house telling me she was dead- they were making a joke out of it."

"How do you mean?", O'mara asked.
"They used Jamaican slang," Sandra sobbed, "what kind of sick joke is that."
"We didn't call your housephone- we were called by a boy called Mark who explained the situation but that was before Rochelle had been shot in the head." Sandra looked at the now concealed body, "Whoever called you must have been a prank caller because it sure was not from us." And then they left, Sandra watched as they put the body in the ambulance and drove off, she whispered, "Sleep well Chelle."

The room was dark when her eyes opened.
This wasn't her room or a hospital, but a place which told her she was safe, no movement or sound just air and she was in it, laying on a bed, she looked down at her arm, it had been bandaged.
Then someone walked in.
"How are you feeling Rochelle."
"No- I dont want to be here," she replied realizing she still existed.
O'mara sat at the edge of the bed.
"You're safe now," he told her, "Did you sleep well?".
She didnt remember going to sleep, just waking up and seeing his face.
"Where am I," she asked looking at his badge.
"Somewhere in Devon- listen Rochelle- are you ok?".
"My arm-" she said looking down at it, "I cant feel it."
"All the nerves are gone Rochelle- when they shot you-"
"I know what happened- where am i, where am i here."
"Rochelle- I've been trying to locate every single member of SSK for the last four years and jail them but as you know with these gangs- that can be virtually impossible- there are members of SSK who still want your blood."
Rochelle's mind was blank and then she said, "Michelle is she-"
"She's safe."
"I need to see her, I need to be with her."
"You can't," he replied.
"Why not."
"Because you're dead," he replied, "they think you're dead." Before she could even take it all in, he continued, "a phone call was made to Mr.Meyers by a member of SSK who said that you "fi dead," as in you're going to be dead- this call was made whilst you were in the warehouse with Monique, Kieran and Rico- if members of SSK were aware that Monique intended to kill you and were brave enough to brag about it over the phone to your loved ones then who knows what they can do to you."

"They think I'm dead?".
"It's for your own safety- you're under the MET's protection- we'll give you a new identity, a fresh start- if you stay in London you will be killed- I was reading your medical files- SSK have put you through a lot- they have members all around London and southern england- why risk another situation."
"But I have nowhere to go," she said holding back her tears hoping some feeling would return to the arm that was shot.
"The MET are going to take care of that-London isn't safe for you- you've already had to kill a girl in self defence and witness your ex boyfriend try to kill you and the Meyers twins- please Rochelle it's the only choice."
"But I have nobody- the only place I know is London."
Then she turned to him, "Where will I go."

"Ah Ms. Duboise- we were told you'd be arriving an hour ago- your is apartement 45A- may we take your bags?".
"Oh no," Charlotte Duboise replied running her fingers through her short brown hair, "Can I take the lift?".
"Yes you can," the apartment complex security guard said. "Oh yes- here is your key and the books you ordered."
He handed her the key and French For Beginners book, "Thankyou," she smiled making her way into the lift. She unlocked her apartment door and threw her suitcase on the bed, O'mara had told her to call him as soon she arrived.
"Hello Billy O'Mara speaking."
"Billy it's me I got here safe."
"Hold on- I'll go into another room...... great- and erm your look- you like it."
"I just need to get used to it- have you spoken to Sandra."
"She's in counselling with the twins and Michelle, they're taking Rochelle's death hard- but we reassured them it was painless- Charlotte- Michelle wrote a poem for Rochelle."
"For the funeral?".
"There was no funeral- it was a cremation."
"What did you cremate?".
"Does it matter- Michelle wrote Rochelle a poem- I'll send it you- Sandra's having a baby, she's naming it Rochelle if its a girl."
A tear ran down Charlotte's eye.
"Charlotte- we've organised for you take French lessons with one of our operatives in Paris- she'll also help to find you work in one of our offices over there."
Charlotte nodded and then said, "The next time you see Michelle- tell her," the tears ran down her face and onto the ground, "Tell her that she's the most wonderful fing in the world."
"I will."
Then O'mara put the phone down. Charlotte wiped her tears and took off her top and looked at the wound in her right arm. She walked over to the mirror and whispered.

"It's me- It's Really Me."


  1. OMFG!! Im actually HOOKED!!
    Ur tales are ON POINT and the cliff hangers at the end of each chapter is quite mindboggling...

    I gave u a MASSIVE shoutout on my blog:

  2. Wow...A Great Way To End It...It Is Over Right..?!?..Moniques Uncle Doesnt Live Opposite Rochelle Does He...?!?..LOL

    Truly Amazing Story Though...Had Me Hooked From The Start...Talk To Noel Clarke About Making A Film..=]...Seriously...I Wud Defo Go And Watch It...=D

  3. much better ending (if it's the end)
    is this really based on a true story?

  4. it must b dun now lol but it was good u really shud b writing books if fuckin jordan can get a book deal u shud defo get one lol

  5. Well done hun.....
    That was really good 90 something followers, you must be doing something right...Started off a bit dodgy but got much better to the end.

  6. yh dis should be turned in to a film, its soo good, but have u writing other stories?

  7. This best not be the end... i visit this shizzle evryday in the hope of a new chapter! :-)

  8. i have been following this blog for months now! best i have read, have to admit it started off a bit shady but the writing really improved

    whoever you are, you are very talented. I wish you the best of luck and hope to see this on my TV screen one day

    good luck! x x

  9. if this was made into a film it wud be soooo decent everybody wud wanna watch it..or it shud be a programme like duplate drama!!

  10. I absolutely LOVE reading this.... I have told all my friends and family to read it...each day wait anxiously for the next chapter to arrive on the blog... and i really mean checking the blog every time i come on my computer lol..... you are such a talented writer and really should be made into a film or a book..... it it was a book i think it would be sat right nex to "a peice of cake" by cupcake brown xxx
    Please dont tell me this is the end of rochelle the london sket..... I NEED YOUR STORIES lol

  11. please tell me dat weren't it!! PLEEEEEEASE! DON'T MAKE ME HAVE TO WATCH TELEVISION! lol

    heavy! xx

  12. really good storyline...but at the end it seemed a bit too far fetched and rushed, the start was a bit more real which i liked. a bit more fine tuning and you could get published! well done.

  13. Heavy. Loved it. Its SHOULD be televised!

  14. im loving dis story...defo wanna see dis on the screens whether it be a film or a series...well done i didnt see dat twist coming...excellent story hooked

  15. where is the next installment?? im hooked on them now!

  16. pls dnt tell me this is the End i NEEEEEEEEEEED more looool

  17. Time for Charlotte the Parisian whore now!!!! Pronto!

    Loved it x

  18. Excellent, really great work
    just gotta watch those spellings
    really really good


    PLEASE AND fooookin hooked like a fish on a rod

  21. absolutely fan-flippin-tastic rochelle sket!!!!
    i haven't been so interested in a story like this 4 time.
    ratings man this was proper interesting
    i must say i did kind of prefer the start tho bcuz it seemed so real wat wit mickey d's and primark and all and the end like the fight got a bit hollywood and dat but i still read them all proper gud rochelle sket.

    however yh, although i agree wit every1 sayin this shud b made in2 a book/film that wud b sick but at the same time it will b like watchin those idiot blak peeps in big brother - embaressing and cringe-worthy bcuz it will giv the general public the view that black girls r nasty hoes like. yh white girls act like this 2 i'm sure but that hasn't been showcased and so if this was i think i wud b disgraced..... i dunno man mayb u can water down sum of the nasty things at the beginning or sumthing - but other dan that this was sick i luvd it u need 2 write more stories whoever u r ur proper talented xx

  22. Well i didnt have to keep checkin the blog...i read them all in one day and...I LOVED IT...but seriously..the most haunting part was the dog scene in that warehouse...yowza..where did you come up with that!!! lmao..but yes...a very good read...i think this should be a book...the imagination factor is more powerful than visuals..i have my vision of Rochelle and making her a visual character could take away from the depth of the imagination!!! Very Good Story..i too need more!!

  23. wow okay so i was sent this blog by a friend, and read half a page and just had to send it to everyone on my blackberry because i just had to share the wealth and the knowledge.
    To the author first off congratulations on captivaing so many young minds to read for pleasue as suppose to for educational purposes , as much a i would love to analyse what ive just spent my day reading in between meetings and deadlines,i felt that the ending was such an anti-climax, almost like going on a date with an incedibly looking partner only to find out that they where rubbish in bed (no pun intended obviously) lol, no in all seriousness i actually got upset at the way in which it ended no word of a lie, i had to read he ending almost three times , its almost as if you lost heart or inspiration. but anyway all i will say is that if you ever decide o write a book let me know because believe i would buy it no doubt in my mind

  24. Very good blog...i think you should make this into a film or series for television because so many young ladies especially need to read this or see this so they can change their actions. I was totally hooked because i read them all in one day....Brilliant story plot.

  25. i spent most ov a whoole evening hooked to this blog .. i think its the ting reali .. Imma tell d whole ov my peeps to read it ASAP x Waiting for the next edition ..

  26. just spent a few hours readin from chapter 1 to 16, was effin great,

    Should have continued being written in the 1st person cos it seemed more real then. I know that cant be da end of R-hoe-chelle.

    I think i mite even write my own story!!! WATCH DIS SPACE!!


  27. really enjoyed this, it was so creative and entertaining. seriously think about making it a proper book and/or a film cos it was very interesting. keep doing what you're doing.

  28. 10/10 keep up teh good work! think about making it into a book or be awriter or something! this piece was so enticing! had me gripped! didn't wana put it down. Loving each chapter and end. Beggining was the best!! 2dope!!! keep up the great work!

  29. you lot r jobless...the story clearly lacks any form of intelligence and a proper beginning,middle and end...therefore it cannot be seen as a true representation of society nor humans and the way in which we interact with each other. Also the fact that Rochelle continues to engage in sexual intercourse/activity with both gendres shows that there is obviously something wrong with Rochelle and the manner in which she thinks. I would therefore like to say that before approaching Noel Clarke you do some major adjustments and character research before trying to persue this so called profession as a "ghetto" author as i feel this story takes the upermost micky wehn refering to the young and deprived of today such as women/girls like Rochelle... YET I MUST SAY THE IDEAS BEHIND SUCH A DRAMATIC INTERNET NOVEL ARE RATHER INTRIGUING..AND COULD ONE DAY BE TAKEN SERIOUSLY.

  30. is that the end? nah thats too simple after the story was hyped like that, the rico and kiren geezer went to pen for rape and after under 18 months there out and they have previous.... humm i think not!
    The police eventually have to let sandra identify the body, so im hoping there is gna b a mad twist there.

    To the writer, throughout each chapter you have honestly captured my atention and with a bit of work this story can be a real sucess. A bit of work in terms of sentence structure, 1st and 3rd person speech, spelling and really grasping who you want your characters to be.

    I would love this story to have a nice ending, because i honestly can feel the heartache of this character and believe that btter has to come for her.
    Or thhe story to have a dramatic ending which makes sense and answers all questions that readers have in thier mind clearly!
    This blog has come to the attention of many young adults many who you can say are from the "ghetto" so it would also be ery nice if a strong message was put accross to them to get them thinking about thier lives in addition to the atttention grabbing story set.

    well done and good luck!

  31. im actually quite sad its over! well done to the authour. Do speak to somebody about turning your stories into books/series/film. wishing you all the success you deserve. vee x

  32. Haters need to bounce off this man kmt
    Im a writer and this story is perfect for a short story. You must be jobless if ur reading it
    This is some serious quality but aint feeling the fact that she died from a bullet to the arm, that aint enuff to kill sum1

  33. She didnt die from a Bullet to the arm, shw was shot in the arm but the police tolde the family she was shot in the hed so it made her look like she was ded so they cud change her identity, thats y her name is charlotte..Charlotte is Rochelles new identity..she Is supposedly Dead to everyone in London Buut she aint..That why michelle was saying but they shot her in her arm..I Have a Feeling "Charlotte" will return to south in the future if there are any more;;

  34. jus been introduced to this blog 2day and im hooked, never seen this coming at all.....its fully nutts, shouts out to the writer

  35. cant believe its finished, i wanted more!!!!

  36. Very gripping story. I pray it wasnt 'your' real life! Because some of this stuff is just too awful to imagine having been done to a human being.

    luved it anyway. Bless

    Check out my blog hun-

  37. well worth staying up til 4am to finish

    brilliant story, well done!

    look forward to seeing this in the cinema ;)

  38. Wow that was just too good, I throughly enjoyed that. It was absolutely riviting & captavating, it had me gripped from the very begining. It makes me wonder how much of it was real and how much of it was fiction. But nonetheless it was a brilliant read. Well Done!!

  39. this is a sad story and if its real it makes it worse. my heart bleeds for chelle cause no matter how much of a "sket" she was she didnt deserve such a painful life. i wish this pianon know one.


  40. enjoyed dat immensely

  41. This story ting is liveeee!

  42. omg im hooked to dis story it is so gd i fink they shud make her family com live wid her

  43. OMG you such a gooooood writer , please keep writing such great pieces this was is amazing started reading it yesterday and could not stop !!! l love the fact that you write things teenagers can realate to its great keep doing it , and l definitely think you shouild write a book !! well done :)

  44. this is heavy been reading it for a whole 2 hours its soooo deep this stuff should be put on tv

  45. omg i had to read this twice cos it was well WOW... :')

  46. this story was sick still bin up all night readin...i had 2 finish it man...tht gyal had 1 fucked up life i swear....this needs 2 b made into a book 4 reall i like alott xx

  47. WoW! I couldn't stop. You should get your work published. It's addictive.
    try contacting urbantopia books, they are a new company publishing stuff for urban / black people. Seriously contact them- (

  48. ino kiesha the sket was the 1st sket story but i thought no other sket storys would be better but i guess i was wrong this is the best sket story and i could picture everything and it was sad to read what she was going through its good 2 no shes still alive but its sad 2 no that her loved ones finks shes dead

  49. wow dis is sum deep shit im actually hooked
    sad 2 no she havent got no fam or anytin

  50. wow amazing

  51. amazing......


    violent yet suttle in some sense......

    applause to the author of this story....

    it may not get published with fame and publicity but it was still bring in thousands.....

  52. FUlly spent all niiite reading that story '
    i stayed up till like what 3:00 cos i fell easleep on the last chapter jus read in now
    This is alortt !
    get thus publishedd man ; its tiiighteee'

  53. Shit, and I thought I could write. Your story is amazing. Growing up in London it strikes me as well how vivid and real you make the story seem. Keep fucking going.